My poem took me about an hour to write. I found myself deleting sentences a lot and writing new ones in. Overall I believe that substance was more important that detail. I used many things that only the audience, or my friend, would understand. I believe that it made the poem personal, but also lack connection to audiences other than my friend. I defiantly was hard to come up with things so personal, but I believe the other audiences will understand the strength of the friendship between my friend and I.
Clint
Difatta
English 1110
Lohre
1-15-13
Payne
How the
years fly, yet your still by my side
Through
sticks and stones cars will never hurt us
The game
then was soccer, but now it is life
We have both
lost good friends
Your birth
name is foreign
You are
always there hill after hill
Though they
seem like mountains
We Have both
lost family
Mistakes as
our teacher
We will use
bleach to the end
Let’s
continue to grow old
In this
world so new
We have both
lost touch
With time
and fate to bring us back
Clint, your poem is very good. It actually sounds and flows like a poem unlike mine. I really like how you made the poem personal to you and your friend; I feel it gives more meaning.
ReplyDeleteI like how quickly the poem moves. It seems like there are a lot of memories you two had and you truly miss this person. The title is also very neat because i think you chose it for a reason. Great job!
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